answered: The admission essay promtp: Discuss an accomplishment, event

  

The admission essay promtp: Discuss an accomplishment, event, or realization that sparked a period of personal growth and a new understanding of yourself or others.
Since this is an admission essay, I really want it to be unique with the first sentence to be eye-catching. I want it to be about my self-growth. I feel like the first sentence should be a diologue.
Please use this as the base/example for the essay:
I’m a twin(I’m a female) and used to be in years-long fight of favoritism. She’s always the smartest with the most common-sense I’ve ever seen in a person. My asian parents love that she wants to take over the family businesses as she grows older while I don’t. She’s the acomplishment while I’m the acts of services. I’ve done acts of services as a way of means to account for the few accomplishments I’ve made that suited my parents’ expectations. I’m quiet and not as out-going but through my big and small acts of services for my family that expanded into my friends and strangers, I’ve since then realized I have become the very meaning of (I can’t seem to remember the word but like a way to say that I act for others and don’t really care for my parents’ approval/favorites anymore, that I’m focused on making everyone around me happy.) Some might think this brings down my self-worth just because I act for others but it doesn’t. It makes me happy that others are happy, it makes me proud of what I do for others.. (happy to make teachers happy with my engagement and works(especially art classes)) and something about always needing to make my teachers proud—.
Thanks!