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Henry Wu
EWRT 1A
Amy Leonard
19 February 2017
Evaluation of Internet Surfing
One thing that millennials do that in moderation makes life easier, but in excess is slow
poison for the brain, is the internet. Many people born after in the nineties have gotten addicted
to surfing the internet. In fact, Bill Gates became the wealthiest person in the world because
people like internet surfing so much. Unfortunately, it is what the people of this generation do
not only on the weekends, but also for hours and hours in their everyday life: in between classes,
on the bus, outside, while eating with friends and even during funerals. It is the first thing people
do when they wake up and the last thing people do when they go to sleep. Internet was originally
invented for convenience. However, the new generation of techies and software engineers has
made the internet so convenient that people forgot how to be human without it. We use it for
everything: taking pictures, directions for driving, recipes for making a dish, connecting with
friends and family, publishing contents, flashlight, calendar, disease diagnosis, and everything in
between. However, people mostly use it for endless mind numbing entertainment. Internet
surfing is extremely bad for a growing person’s developing psyche, because it is bad for health
and way too addicting.
First of all, internet surfing is very bad for a person’s mental and psychological
development because it is very addicting. Just go anywhere and it is apparent: in the bus stop, in
the classroom, on the streets and anywhere else, people are looking down at their phones and not
at each other, or at their surroundings. According to Howard, a recent study of an MRI research
showed the brain activities of drug and alcohol addicts behaving the same as those who are used
to surfing the internet. The research also reported severe withdrawal symptoms, both physical
and mental, to those who were denied internet for just one day (5). Internet addiction can
interfere with all areas of a person’s life. The person can forget to do important things that he or
she should do because mindlessly surfing the internet is so much more comfortable and
entertaining. He or she may forget to do his or her homework, forget an appointment, ignore a
friend or family member and not ever read. Internet addiction is very harmful to developing
minds because it makes people neglect important things. It can also rewrite one’s brain making
him or her addicted, hence unable to ‘survive’ without it.
Additionally, internet surfing is harmful because it makes us think less critically. The
internet has made it so convenient for us that we do not remember what it is like to live without it
and we can’t imagine living without it. If we want to add some numbers, our first instinct is to
open the calculator application and never learn how to add $27 to $56. When we want to break
up with someone, we just send a simple text instead of doing it in person, which makes it so
much less classy. When we go out somewhere, we can lose our natural sense of directions
because the we can just whip out google maps and the directions would be right there. According
to Carr, those who use the internet to study and dig up information, tend to remember less than
those who sat in a library to read. He adds that a lot of distractions and messages or emails makes
them lose concentration. He also adds that those who do tasks one at a time, enable the brain to
utilize the information well, and hence think more critically, than those who juggle up
information (5 and 6). Internet surfing is harmful because it takes away our need to think
critically, therefore making the brain exercise less and makes us dim. The reason is because the
brain also functions as a muscle. Without continuous use or challenges, it will stay undeveloped
and makes us mentally dim or slow. To add on that, with the knowledge that something is just a
click away, one does not need to ponder in order to get it. The internet has all the answers, even
the ones you never expect. Type any word in the internet and it is there, hence laziness, and
therefore people become less critical thinkers.
Moreover, internet surfing makes people lazy, especially the addicts, hence it will make
humans vulnerable since the dependence will make computers to control us. Going to the
hospital becomes a problem, because there are many websites like mayoclinic.org among others,
which can diagnose the type of illnesses by keying in one’s symptoms. Solving a mathematical
equation can also be performed by a computer. This has led to ideas of creating Artificial
Intelligence, AIs that can help humans with solving their problems, and ‘make the world a better
place’. AIs are good, but very dangerous. As Nick Bostrom states in his talk, “…A super
intelligence with such technological maturity will be extremely powerful, and at least in such
scenarios, it will be able to get what it wants. We would then have a future that would be shaped
by the preferences of this AI…” (8:24). This statement proves exactly that too much internet
surfing will make the computers control us. This is because of the fact that with the many
capabilities that a computer can perform without getting tired, unlike the human brains, scientists
got the idea of creating an AI that can help in many tasks. There is even an introduction of a
home assistant robots introduced by Cynthia Breazeal. She said, “…So what I’ve learned through
building these systems is that robots are actually a really intriguing social technology, where it’s
actually their ability to push our social buttons and to interact with us like a partner that is a
core part of their functionality. And with that shift in thinking, we can now start to imagine new
questions, new possibilities for robots that we might not have thought about otherwise…” (3:18).
This means that there are further developments to even make the assistant robots more human
and socialize with humans. Humans become lazy and assistant robots can be developed further,
and even made to be AIs. With the capability of AIs to rapidly grow smarter, they can end up
controlling humans, which is in turn, extremely dangerous.
In conclusion, the three most important reasons why internet surfing is very harmful to
the human mind is because one, people can easily get extremely addicted, two, it makes life way
too convenient and people are not challenged to think critically, and lastly, it makes people lazy
and this can lead to the risk of being controlled by Artificial Intelligence. I think internet surfing
is one of the most harmful things a person can do on weekends or in their free time, because
unlike poison or a bullet which can harm a person in matter of split seconds, internet addiction
slowly seeps into every aspect of a person’s life and it takes control of mental discipline and
critical thinking. Becoming too much dependent on the computer to help solve our day to day
lives can risk the potential of being controlled by computers. One should therefore use the
internet sparingly and only when necessary. It should not be part of the basic need but just to
speed up things and life goes on. AIs should be programed in a way that they obey human
command so that we can avoid the risk of them controlling the world. Therefore, the internet is
one of the most useful and most harmful technology in today’s world. I think humans are smart
enough to be able to use it to their advantage, yet not be consumed and controlled by it.
However, most of the population are not doing that very well as it is evident. This is very
reasonable for internet surfing to be the most harmful thing to humans in the world.
Works Cited
Carr, Nicholas. How the Internet is making us stupid. The Telegraph. United Kingdom. 2010.
Web. Retrieved from
http://www.telegraph.co.uk/technology/internet/7967894/How-the-Internet-is-making-usstupid.html
Howard, Jacqueline. This Is How the Internet Is Rewiring Your Brain. The Huffington Post. New
York City. 2013. Web. Retrieved from
http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2013/10/30/shocking-ways-internet-rewires-brain_n_413
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TED. “What happens when our computers get smarter than we are? | Nick Bostrom” Online
video clip. YouTube. YouTube, 27 April 2015. Web.
TED. “The Rise of Personal Robots | Cynthia Breazeal | TED Talks.” Online video clip. You
Tube. You Tube, 8 February 2011. Web.
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